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For those of you that do feel college athletes deserve to be paid, think of it this way. Picture the star of your favorite college team. Football, baseball, swimming, whatever it is, think of the most important player to the team. Now imagine that player is caught accepting a bribe. Perhaps he or she is receiving weekly payments and depositing that money straight into the weekend party funds (this is college we’re talking about). Would this anger you? Would it disappoint you that your team’s star athlete’s sole priority wasn’t sports? After all, if it requires money for one to play a sport, how much could that player really love the game?

With so many aspects to consider, forming an opinion on this type subject can be very difficult. Imagine that the star player of your favorite college team is caught accepting a bribe from a member within the organization. Chances are that the athlete isn't using this under the table cash for basic necessities such as food or school supplies. Unfortunately, this money is most likely being deposited straight into the party funds (this is college we're talking about. Upon hearing this news about your team's captain, or leader, do you think this would anger you? Would it disappoint you to hear that this player has more on his mind than just the team? After all, if it requires money in order to get an athlete to perform, he or she probably doesn't respect the team enough to be on it.